
Tornados rarely formed during the hot Oklahoma summer, but the still, humid air signaled a coming storm. Joe stood on his porch, watching. Hearing footsteps, he turned and saw a man standing a few feet away, a baseball bat in hand.
“Jesus Boone, you scared the shit out of me. What’s up with the….”
The bat connected with Joe’s head before he could finish the sentence. Toppling off the porch, Joe landed in the dirt, blood pooling in the dead grass. As thunder clapped, Boone raced toward the road.
Standing in the shadows of the front door, a small figure watched everything.
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This story was inspired by Rochelle Wisoff-Field’s Friday Fictioneer’s . Thanks to Rochelle for providing this week’s photo.
Great story .
I feel for the small shadow , equally .
Boone had best be worried. Thanks for reading
My pleasure, Susan. 🙂
Ouch, what had Joe done to deserve that? Great little drama.
I’m glad you enjoyed it. Thanks!
What a grisly scene, Susan, full of revenge and intrigue, especially at the end.
Thanks Kelvin. I hope one day to turn the story into a full novel. It’s not quite there yet.
I am hooked, I want to know more…
I’m working on that. Thanks for reading!
Dear Susan,
You left a lot up to the imagination…meaning, I want to know more.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle. This was part of a larger piece I am working on. Getting the first scene down to 100 words was a challenge but it sounds like it paid off
A tale of terror with an intriguing open end. Brilliant.
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Thanks Keith. I’m glad you enjoyed it
The small shadow eventually became a hero and got vengeance on Mr. Boone? Well done! ^_^
Villains need to be aware of partially open doors. You never know who is lurking in the shadows. Thanks for reading.
The little shadow reminded me of the ‘Harmonica’ character played by Charles Bronson in Sergio Leone’s masterpiece ‘Once Upon a Time in the West’. This one has potential.
That’s good to hear Varad. Thanks for reading!
There’s a story building here. That little shadow is going to become Boone’s nemesis, I think.
She definitely plays a role in his undoing. That’s for reading
Well Written
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