The Wall

Welcome to this week’s edition of Friday Fictioneers. The goal is to write a complete story using 100 words or less based on a photo prompt. This week’s story is a rework of a longer piece I wrote a year ago. I don’t know what is more challenging; writing a completely new story or editing a longer story so it maintains the essence of the original. Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for hosting this challenge and J Hardy Carroll for this week’s photograph. If you would like to add your own story, or read other stories like this, head to Rochelle’s Friday’s Fictioneers.

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Photo Credit: J. Hardy Carroll

Ziggy sat on the edge of the couch, mesmerized by empty space between the steeple clock on the mantel and the ceiling above. Her tail twitched as a guttural growl erupted from deep inside her throat. Ziggy’s odd behavior concerned her owner Charlotte. A recent bee sting had sent her daughter Adeline into anaphylactic shock. Another occurrence could be deadly.

Placing Adeline against her shoulder, Charlotte examined the wall. Relieved to find nothing there, Charlotte turned her back to the clock, facing Ziggy.

“Silly cat. There is nothing….”

Charlotte’s words were cut short by Adeline’s screams of terror.

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40 thoughts on “The Wall

  1. gripping.
    yikes – and cat’s know… don’t they?
    also like how you led us up to this – from imagining someone staring at the space and then having it a cat and all the rest

    1. the original title of the longer piece is Invisible Monsters. My cat seems to see things I can’t see and I just took it from there. My intent is that there is something horrifying on the wall that only the cat and baby could see. Thanks for commenting Susan. Much appreciated.

    1. i wrote the story originally with my own cat in mind. She seems to see things that we don’t see. Like a tiny bug. There isn’t a beehive in the clock, but there is something terrifying.. I appreciate you taking time to comment. Thanks!

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